Sunday, January 04, 2015

Start this fresh

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"I was waiting for your call the whole day and I was dying to talk to you!" he said.

"I'm sorry honey, I was surrounded by people in the party and I did not notice the time." I said.

"Right! Surrounded by people." he nodded.

"Honey, I thought of calling you" he took his coat "after reaching home." I tried to explain.

"Good bye!" he said and this time he did not even give me a chance to ask if we can start this fresh.


This post is a part of Five Sentence Fiction Activity - Fresh at LillieMcFerrin.com

16 comments :

  1. Sad when a relationship gets to this point, with such mistrust. I know the feeling. You illustrated it very well.
    http://amodernvampire.blogspot.com/2015/01/a-horrible-realization.html

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  2. Trust is so important in any relationship.

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  3. oh, be weary of the overly jealous boyfriends - they are either dangerous or cheating - glad she got rid of him, no matter how that must hurt - great story!

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    1. Thank you Cheryl! I'm glad you liked it :)

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  5. Nice one for the prompt. So many relationships sadly reach such a point that they cannot be made up at all :(.

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    1. Thank you Aseem. Thanks for stopping by and welcome to my blog :)

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  6. Sad that it had to end this sad way.
    But, then, may be that's best for the couple... Perhaps they'll decide to start afresh later!
    Best wishes for the new year!

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  7. Perhaps they'll..

    Happy New Year to you too Anita! Thanks for stopping by. :)

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  8. May be I have a different take, firstly if two people failed to have basic understanding what happened was surely a fate. Secondly, he calling it quits for a small reason as that not justified as such but his longing for her the whole day does, I value that emotion as there are people wouldn't care where and what their love is doing and thirdly if this was the fate am sure both would meet their betters in time to come!
    Coming to the write up, it's crisp, I like it when lot is conveyed in less words, many fail to do it. So patting you for this one Sankeerth :)

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    1. Heya Shweta! Above is pretty good analysis. But, yeah, basic understanding works good only for a certain period of time, till you don't start getting worried about .:)

      Thank you very much for the complement :)

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